Oh my God, I’m lying. It was great. Every time you add a new character, they’re more unique than the last. What an array of characters. I expected Felix shooting the coin was a trick played on him. I’m gonna have to keep my eye on him.
LOL You had me for a second. I was immediately thinking of how I could improve from a chapter just being “okay.” 😂
Making up new interesting people/aliens is one of the most fun things about this story. I can just put whatever first appears in my head into a character, and it’s not weird or out of place. I love it. I thought Valen would be alone, then Ves showed up in the hangar like she had been there all along.
I love Felix so much. He’s such a goober, and putting him in crazy situations makes me laugh. No idea where he’ll end up by the end of the story, but I’m sure it will be fun finding out.
So happy you’re liking it! It’s so different from Iris, so it’s cool that you enjoy both stories. ❤️
I believe it’s mentioned in chapter 2, when he wakes up from being bitten by Mark. It’s been several weeks since that chapter though, so maybe I should have mentioned it again before now. 😅
I have the same problem with dialogue tags. They annoy me but if I have more than 2 characters they start to feel necessary. I try not to put so many in and instead frame the words with an action where I can. I noticed you do that too in quite a few places. If the tags bug you maybe you can do more of that? But with a big cast I think it's pretty standard to have lots of tags? In dialogue heavy scenes I envy script writers 😆
It was okay.
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Oh my God, I’m lying. It was great. Every time you add a new character, they’re more unique than the last. What an array of characters. I expected Felix shooting the coin was a trick played on him. I’m gonna have to keep my eye on him.
Keep it coming.
LOL You had me for a second. I was immediately thinking of how I could improve from a chapter just being “okay.” 😂
Making up new interesting people/aliens is one of the most fun things about this story. I can just put whatever first appears in my head into a character, and it’s not weird or out of place. I love it. I thought Valen would be alone, then Ves showed up in the hangar like she had been there all along.
I love Felix so much. He’s such a goober, and putting him in crazy situations makes me laugh. No idea where he’ll end up by the end of the story, but I’m sure it will be fun finding out.
So happy you’re liking it! It’s so different from Iris, so it’s cool that you enjoy both stories. ❤️
I agree with you! Such a great story and I’m totally hooked! I’m a few days late reading but I’m so thrilled!
A, you are so talented! Can’t wait for next week’s chapter!
What's the treatment for?? Aarrgh! Leaving us hanging...
I believe it’s mentioned in chapter 2, when he wakes up from being bitten by Mark. It’s been several weeks since that chapter though, so maybe I should have mentioned it again before now. 😅
Yeah, I totally forgot about that. Got caught up!
Another great chapter, thoroughly enjoyed reading it.
Thank you so much! I’m very happy you enjoyed it. Cheers! 🍻
I have the same problem with dialogue tags. They annoy me but if I have more than 2 characters they start to feel necessary. I try not to put so many in and instead frame the words with an action where I can. I noticed you do that too in quite a few places. If the tags bug you maybe you can do more of that? But with a big cast I think it's pretty standard to have lots of tags? In dialogue heavy scenes I envy script writers 😆
Omg yes. So much easier to do a busy dialogue scene in a script. lol
I gotta go back and read the rest!
Yeah you do! The first time they meet Felix is my favorite Felix moment.